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JimTK
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Phew! That is quality, Seagoat. Love the descriptive power of your short sentences, the pace of the narrative, the sense of location and the understated central character. You don’t give much away but there are enough hooks to make me want to know more. It’s atmospheric – rather dark and brooding – and intriguing.
Buried questions: who is Brad? Why was he discharged from the army? Where did he learn to play trumpet? Who is/was Maggie if not his mother? What was that dream about? What is the dark secret that seems to be in his background? Why do these strangers seem to recognise him from somewhere? All of that loaded into an opening chapter and giving you the fuel to develop and reveal over subsequent pages. It has legs!