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emmab
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I also really enjoyed it, though now I’m feeling a little sad.

I’d take all of Harry’s points, and maybe also you could re-work the end of the last sentence a bit? cut it to “umbrella had passed hands.” Saves you two words (I know how hard 500 word stories are!).

G’luck!