Legend Blues Chapter 1

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  • #3591
    seagoat
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    Unpublished novel 35 chapters This is the first. Does it make you want to read the second?

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    #3593
    HarryStotle
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    To answer your question, yes, yes, yes!

    #3600
    JimTK
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    Phew! That is quality, Seagoat. Love the descriptive power of your short sentences, the pace of the narrative, the sense of location and the understated central character. You don’t give much away but there are enough hooks to make me want to know more. It’s atmospheric – rather dark and brooding – and intriguing.
    Buried questions: who is Brad? Why was he discharged from the army? Where did he learn to play trumpet? Who is/was Maggie if not his mother? What was that dream about? What is the dark secret that seems to be in his background? Why do these strangers seem to recognise him from somewhere? All of that loaded into an opening chapter and giving you the fuel to develop and reveal over subsequent pages. It has legs!

    #3602
    Helen
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    Loved that! Such economy but saying so much. Do we get to see a second chapter?

    #3621
    Kit-Kat
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    I think there is a lot of mileage in this character. You have mapped out enough questions to hook the reader about a credible persona who is going to surprise us. It’s a goer for me.

    #3629
    Colliewobble
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    Definitely keen to know more! Keep going!

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