Harry, thank you for your constructive comments. This is the first thing I’ve ever written and shown to anyone, apart from my poems which I had used in an English lesson on my access course 8 years ago.
I have a book I’m writing at the moment, and took a (very long) break from it, only to come back to it during some stress leave from work. I’ve begun a creative writing course on openlearn, and playing with my characters in the book in the activities I’m doing for it.